We resemble one plant plant same, those who need the warmth of sunshine and dew is alimentary, and the sunshine favour that a few things on growing road need like us, help us grow.
我们像一株植物一样，需要阳光的温暖和露水的滋养，而成长道路上的一些事就像我们所需要的阳光雨露，帮助我们成长。
I when elementary school, always have an insatiable desire for play, achievement discretion, want to be taken an examination of very well once only, I am met get dizzy with success. But in those days the teacher's instruction, resembling is a sunshine on my growing road.
小学时的我，总是贪玩，成绩时高时低，只要有一次考得很好，我就会得意忘形。但那时老师的教诲，像是我成长路上的一缕阳光。
This Chinese examination paper was sent, the likelihood is examination paper very simple, before I took an examination of whole class 3, the teacher still praised me, become very happy in my heart at that time. Look at above have a lot of red the examination paper that cancel, does: think in my heart? Does brightness Fu prick midge of gorge of doubt of of ィ of mellow horsefly of engrave angry pay excuse me of of beautiful of danger of bud of brandish of arm of large bamboo hat of courtyard of of Chun Mang of pay of mystery of besmear envy?
这次语文试卷发了下来，可能是卷子非常简单，我考了全班前三，老师还表扬了我，当时我的心里乐开了花。看着上面有许多红勾的卷子，我心里想:语文这么简单，我上课没怎么听就考得这么好，以后也不用认真听了。
Did not pass how long, took an examination of a piece of examination paper again. I think I can follow to loosen easily euqally gently last again take an examination of high component, can come down when examination paper hair when, I am astonied, 69 minutes! With differred more than 10 minutes last.
没过多久，又考了一张试卷。我认为我又能跟上次一样轻轻松松考高分，可当试卷发下来的时候，我大吃一惊，69分！与上次相差了十多分。
The place in all these and my heart wants to appear by detection of Chinese teacher place. Chinese teacher calls me the office, call me the examination paper on the belt. She asks me: &Do you know Ldquo; why did your achievement drop so much? ” I am low only first, nod slightly, I present far from dare orthoptic teacher, fear to wait can meet receive reprimand. “ modesty makes the person progresses, pride makes a person backward. Your expression I look in the eye, you this grade is so poor need you also know a reason, you are returned hard now not late, I believe you. Every word that Mr. ” says is written down every sentences to be in the heart by me, wherefrom begins, I no longer proud.
这一切和我心里所想似乎都被语文老师所看穿。语文老师把我叫到办公室，并叫我带上卷子。她问我:“你知道你成绩为什么下降了这么多吗？”我只是低下头，微微点了点头，现在的我根本不敢直视老师，害怕等会会迎来一番训斥。“谦虚使人进步，骄傲使人落后。你的表现我都看在眼里，你这次的成绩这么差相必你也知道原因，你现在努力还不算晚，我相信你。”老师说的每字每句都被我记在心中，从那开始，我不再骄傲。
The instruction of the teacher on growing road as it is sunshine and dew, the maturity of they are alimentary our heart.
成长路上老师的教诲如同是阳光和露水，它们滋养着我们心灵的成熟。
Author: Zheng Sai
作者：郑思
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导师点评：
The article undertakes narrative around the sunshine ” on “ growing road, feel exceedingly active to the person on whole energy. The first paragraph state should direct bring out the theme, it is clear to tell the story that should tell next tell the story that should tell next, such gift will be nicer introduce. The more significant turn that in saying to learn in Chinese then, encounters, the turn that young writer describes, one before one hind particularly good from what take an examination of to what take an examination of very poor, this kind of dramatic clue is arranged, very pretty good. Highlight article center next, also be young writer does hum a bit best, can undertake treatise around the center closely. Dramatic nature cuts whole article again and article topic. Proposal young writer is in of Chinese apply on it is better to can have new idea more.
文章围绕“成长路上的阳光”进行叙述，整体上给人感觉非常的积极正能量。第一段的表述应该直接点题，把接下来要讲的故事交代清楚，这样才会更好的引入。接着说了在语文学习中遇见的比较重要的转折，小作者描述的转折，一前一后从考的特别好到考的很差，这种戏剧性的情节安排，非常不错。接下来突出文章中心，也是小作者做嗯最好的一点，能够紧紧围绕中心进行论述。整篇文章生动自然又切和文章主题。建议小作者在语文的运用上能够更有新意就更好了。
Directive teacher: Xu Xia
指导老师：胥侠