Yang Gaozhao admires outside the window, without a wind, the cicada that hears intermittence a few times only cries; In the classroom, “ rustle is sanded, sanded rustle ” , hear classmates to write rapidly only sound, everybody is knitting Shuang Mei closely, expression is undertaking maths takes an exam dedicatedly.
窗外艳阳高照，没有一丝风，只听到几声时断时续的蝉鸣；教室里，“沙沙沙，沙沙沙”，只听到同学们飞快的写字声，大家正紧皱双眉，神情专注地进行着数学考试。
Abrupt, shine upon of a shadow is on my examination paper, on from time to time, below from time to time, from time to time is wrong, from time to time is right. Prepare abide to wear in me when shadow seeks source, shadow disappeared suddenly. Then, I immerse oneself in an exam again. Accomplish last to ponder over a problem eventually, in my heart secretly chuckle to oneself, be in at this moment, shadow appeared again, go up to fall suddenly suddenly. I look as shadow rapidly, it is person of a rings so, swing outside the window, hang down from upstairs. My cerebral sea mile begins together of thoughts or recollections flashing across one's mind: Is when somebody attends class, upstairs class employing rings person? Who can you be?
突然，一个阴影映照在我的试卷上，时而上，时而下，时而左，时而右。就在我准备循着影子寻找来源时，影子忽然不见了。于是，我又埋头考试。终于做到最后一道思考题啦，我的心中暗自窃喜，就在这时，影子又出现了，忽上忽下。我赶紧随着影子望去，原来是一个竹节人，荡在窗外，是从楼上垂下来的。我的脑海里开始浮想联翩：楼上的班级有人上课的时候在玩竹节人？会是谁呢？出自 wwW.zuoWEnBA.nEt
“ bites bell bell ……” as finish class since bell noise, I cry: You see “ , there is a rings person outside the window. ” immediately, classmates rush up in a crowd, squeeze the window to look at rings person together. A bold classmate stretchs his hand actually, take everything into one's own hands lived it, dragged. See this is the rings person of make it of a shaft that use wool only, the head is joining a body, still the bamboo with 8 short cut parts make it the limb of rings person, use a cord to string, there still is facial feature on cheek, look Jovian. Look at this rings person, everybody with a chirp is troubled by: “ how is this done? Very fierce! How does ”“ play this? ”“ looks to me, look to me! I know ”“ how to play, play to me! ” everybody you one character me one language, earning grabbing should play.
“叮铃铃……”随着下课铃声响起，我大叫一声：“你们看，窗外有个竹节人。”顿时，同学们一拥而上，一起挤到窗口看着竹节人。有个大胆的同学竟然一伸手，一把抓住了它，拽了进来。只见这是一个用毛笔杆做成的竹节人，头连着身子，还有八截短的竹子分别做成了竹节人的四肢，并用一根绳子串连起来，脸蛋上还画着五官，看起来威风凛凛。看着这竹节人，大家叽叽喳喳闹开了：“这是怎么做的？好厉害啊！”“这个怎么玩呀？”“给我看看，给我看看！”“我知道怎么玩，给我玩玩！”大家你一言我一语，挣着抢着要玩。
Do not know when, the teacher appears in everybody after one's death, ask aloud: What do you surround “ together to work? Was exercise written? ” everybody break up a hubbub, on the seat that returns oneself. I am taking rings person, say to the teacher: “ bark teacher, when a moment ago our maths takes an exam, hanged down from upstairs classroom this rings person. ” barks the teacher saw rings person carefully, ask: “ hangs down from upstairs? ”“ yes. I answer ” . Does when attending class, “ hang down? ”“ yes. ” classmates answer. What did bark teacher understand it seems that, saw us meaningfully, clear clear the throat, say of ground of sincere words and earnest wishes: “ classmates, this classmate that employs rings person attends class to be absent certainly absorption attend a lecture, swing the toy to play from the window actually, still affected our class exam, do you feel he is done so be opposite? ” ground of all with one voice answers everybody: “ is incorrect! ”“ is. ” bark teacher continues say, he does “ so, affected oneself study already, also affected the study of all of us, such behavior is caustic person is not hoggish. Ask you to remember 3 words: Caustic person's not hoggish thing, do not do stoutly; The thing of personal benefit person is considering caustic to do; Benefit person's hoggish thing must be done! Did everybody remember? ”“ remembered! ”
不知什么时候，老师出现在大家身后，大声问道：“你们围在一起干什么？作业都写完了吗？”大家一哄而散，回到自己的座位上。我拿着竹节人，对老师说：“汪老师，刚才我们数学考试的时候，从楼上教室里垂下来了这个竹节人。”汪老师仔细看了一眼竹节人，问道：“从楼上垂下来的吗？”“是的。”我回答。“是上课的时候垂下来的？”“是的。”同学们答道。汪老师似乎明白了什么，意味深长地看了我们一眼，清了清嗓子，语重心长地说道：“同学们，这个玩竹节人的同学上课一定不在专心听讲，竟然把玩具从窗户里荡下来玩，还影响到了我们班考试，你们觉得他这样做对吗？”大家异口同声地回答：“不对！”“是呀。”汪老师继续说道，“他这样做，既影响了自己的学习，也影响了我们大家的学习，这样的行为是损人不利己的。请你们记住三句话：损人不利己的事，坚决不做；损己利人的事考虑着做；利人利己的事一定要做！大家记住了吗？”“记住了！”
“ is good, attend class! ”
“好，上课！”
“ stands up! ”
“起立！”
“ fellow students are good! ”
“同学们好！”
Mr. “ is good! ”
“老师好！”
“ sits please! ”
“请坐！”
“ this class, we continue to learn ……”
“这节课，我们继续学习……”
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本文描写了课堂上的一个小插曲，通过对这个小插曲的描写表达了自己的想法。作文中也提到了老师顺势对同学们的教育，整篇作文叙述生动，语言流畅，情节连贯，结构紧凑，而且作文感情真挚。作文中描写很精彩的地方是自己对班级同学一哄而上看竹节人的那段描写，动词使用的很恰当。作文的篇幅很长，包含的内容也很多，老师很难想象这居然是二年级的小朋友写的，很出乎意料，整体而言是一篇很优秀的作文，老师非常喜欢，希望你可以再接再厉，继续加油，期待你下次的作文哦！