This year summer vacation, i, glad of Tu Yan, Xie You and Ou Yangrui are sent go to summer camp.
今年暑假，我、屠焱、叶宥欣和欧阳瑞致去夏令营。
I am not to mix they are one group, because of threesome, somebody counts the limitation that go up, I do not join them, what can not think of is to still have two also are two little sisters that are elbowed out, my be forced to do, can follow them only a group, really regrettablly, but I also am two to have a bit to them not self-confident, so I should be in this respect more redouble one's efforts, ability lets our group notch.
我并不是和他们一组，因为三人一组，有人数上的限制，我就不加入他们，可没想到的是还有两个也是被排挤的两个妹妹，我迫不得已，只能跟她们一组，真是可惜了，可我对她们两个也是有一点不自信，所以我要在这方面更加倍努力，才能让我们组得分。
This summer camp has a special activity, hold an activity on beach namely, among them one piles Sha Diao namely.
这个夏令营有个特殊的活动，就是在海滩上举行活动，其中一个就是堆沙雕。
Begin to pile Sha Diao, time 15 minutes, I want to pile a boat originally, but they just let me twice dig swim pool, the teacher also said: “ not is the group finished? Do not have a mark. ”
开始堆沙雕了，计时15分钟，我本来想堆个船的，可她们两个硬是让我挖泳池，老师也说了：“不小组完成？是没有分数的。”
I also do not have method, can dig with them only swim pool. I see that sea is in flood, must want “ to move ” just goes, but those two little little sisters also do not understand, be absorbed in be being dug downward, be in all the time ceaselessly flood, water gradually prep above our swim pool, also be moment built a wall, but “ years not Rao Ren ” , remnant is last 3 minutes, although Europe is in relief,build their castle the ground is mere in perfect order, when arriving but Ou Yanghai is in keep making trouble, with a passageway, will let us ” of two “ country is interlinked, building a city wall originally is a very troublesome issue, want to take sodden sand first, do it high again, observe flow is swelled to what height even, the height of ” of readjust “ city wall, be wided again in case, but Europe this world adds an oil to add a vinegar again, hurry-scurry, wish oneself grow a three heads and six arms-superhuman to resist this is catastrophic, return remnant 1 minute, in those 14 minutes cooperate under, we have tacit agreement more, mere in perfect order, I am in charge of digging sand, hold sand into the city wall, resist briny descent, then two another little little sisters are digging Chi Li's sand, give me the sand inside, let me a city walls of those sand make it, each groups were being sent mad the same Sha Diao that finish, but only our group still cooperates very close to each other.
我也没有办法，只能跟她们挖泳池。我看见那大海在涨潮，必须要“搬家”才行，可那两个小妹妹也不懂，只顾着往下挖，一直在不断地涨潮，水渐渐地高于我们的泳池，也是时候造起墙了吧，但是“岁月不饶人”，只剩最后3分钟了，虽然欧阳把他们的城堡造地仅仅井井有条，到时但是欧阳还在不停地捣乱，用一条通道，来让我们两个“国家”相通，本来造城墙是一件很麻烦的事情，先要把烂沙子拿起来，再把它弄得高高的，还要观察涨潮涨到什么高度，再调整“城墙”的高度，以防再次被淹，但是欧阳再添个油加个醋，手忙脚乱，恨不得自己长出三头六臂来抵御这场灾难，还剩1分钟，在那14分钟的配合之下，我们更有默契，仅仅井井有条，我负责挖沙子，把沙子捏成城墙，抵御海水的侵袭，那另外的两个小妹妹在挖池里的沙子，把里面的沙子给我，让我把那些沙子做成城墙，各个组都在发了疯一样的完成沙雕，但只有我们组还配合无间。
Begin appraise through comparison the Sha Diao of each groups, the teacher says: &Ldquo; saw this Sha Diao, I become ’ of ‘ Sha Diao. ”
开始评比各个小组的沙雕，老师说:“看了这沙雕，我就成‘沙雕’了。”
Carve piling sand is really interesting.
堆沙雕真有趣。
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导师点评：
It is interesting activity really. Do not pass, young writer question is more, one is partial place sentence is written not clear and coherent, affected the expression of young writer badly, want to know this is the basic skill that the composition writes, do not get cursorily, want vigorously above ah! Another more serious, article whole is written confusedly, partial place does not have logic, this must want to solve, the proposal reads the article with read a family good later more, do not read much, read essence of life, going to analytic other people is how of section, the family is how of wording and phrasing, the family is how of select material, will contrast again oneself composition, undertake modification next, hold to period of time, the effect came out, cheer!
真是一次有趣的活动。不过呢，小作者问题比较多哦，一个是部分地方句子写不通顺，严重影响了小作者的表达，要知道这个是作文写作的基本功，马虎不得，要花大力气在上面呀！另一个更严重，文章整体写得混乱，部分地方没有逻辑，这个必须要解决，建议以后多去读读人家好的文章，不读多，读精，去分析人家是怎样分段的，人家是怎样遣词造句的，人家是怎样选材的，再来对照自己的作文，然后进行修改，坚持一段时间，效果就出来了，加油呀！